书签上的英译文
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The sun is fallling behind the mountain,
The river is going toward the ocean.
To look further far away,
Step up higher on your way.
The sun is setting along the mountain rims
the yellow river is entering the ocean waves
to have a vision reaches thousands miles far
please stepping up to the another level above
The sun is setting along the mountain rims
the yellow river is entering the ocean waves
to have a vision reaches thousands miles far
.......
Wow, very good!
A suggestion:
1. In original Chinese version, the word "yellow" is used to match the "word" "white" in 1st sentence.
Since there is no "white sun" in English, there is no need to use "yellow" river in its English version.
Just my 2 Cents.
Heihei!
The sun is setting along the mountain rims
The river is entering the ocean waves
To have a vision reaches thousand-distant-miles
Stepping higher to A storey above
white sun可能会让老美摸不着头脑，但白日可以翻译为glaring sun(耀日），这样就与yellow river相对应了。在英语里yellow除了指黄色之外，也有柔软，懦弱的意思，所以与glaring在感官上的效果相对。穷和更这种有力度的词也应该翻译出来。否则，译文没有原文的灵魂，只剩下一个躯壳。
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发表于 2011-9-1 15:52:09
发表于 2011-8-31 17:48:03
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