引用第7楼一飞于2013-01-15 21:17发表的 回 楼主(詩酒年華) 的帖子 :
小小年纪能写出如此悦耳的诗句,能有如此超龄的思想,太不简单了。大赞!!!!衷心地祝福小诗,也祝福你们全家人。我发现了几处小错,想必是你打字时的不小心。
1. Working with your friend
3rd stanza “When we were friends we have fun” should be “we had fun”
2. You and I see
2nd stanza: “Now it’s in the flue sky” Is it meant to be “blue sky”?
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